This is a great example of why editing can make all the difference. But it’s not just for writing, it’s for speeches too. It is even more important in a speech, because the tighter the content, the more likely the audience will stay with you until the end.
Most people find it hard to cut out even one word, much less a whole idea, but if it doesn’t add to your overall message, if it isn’t something the audience needs to hear, then ax it. This is not about you, it’s about them. Read more in (And other wisdom from Steve Jobs) add link to other post
So take the time, edit your words, your thoughts your ideas and the result will be a better, more compelling speech. And who don’t want that!!